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** {{Color|Old:}} "Rimechime cowers {{Highlight|within wind chimes}}, tremblingly timid. Should it encounter {{Highlight|its beloved}}, it exhausts every means available to {{Highlight|vanish from sight.}}"
** {{Color|Old:}} "Rimechime cowers {{Highlight|within wind chimes}}, tremblingly timid. Should it encounter {{Highlight|its beloved}}, it exhausts every means available to {{Highlight|vanish from sight.}}"
** {{Color|New:}} "Rimechime cowers {{Highlight|inside a wind bell}}, tremblingly timid. Should it encounter {{Highlight|the one it longs for}}, it exhausts every means available to {{Highlight|hide itself away.}}"
** {{Color|New:}} "Rimechime cowers {{Highlight|inside a wind bell}}, tremblingly timid. Should it encounter {{Highlight|the one it longs for}}, it exhausts every means available to {{Highlight|hide itself away.}}"
* Story was updated:
** {{Color|Old:}} "The forest lay dappled in sunlight as Rimechime kept low, flying always in the girl's shadow. It was a stalking trick{{highlight|—one it had mastered}}. Surely, the girl hadn't noticed? But at the moment she turned her head, Rimechime plunged into a pile of dry leaves, dandelion fluff tickling its nose... Was it too slow? The girl {{highlight|parted}} the leaves {{highlight|and cupped Rimechime in her hands}}. In that instant, their eyes met.<br>"Was that {{highlight|beautiful}} sound yours?"<br>"Ding-ling-ling~""
** {{Color|New:}} "The forest lay dappled in sunlight as Rimechime kept low, flying always in the girl's shadow. It was a stalking trick{{highlight|, one it knew by heart}}. Surely, the girl hadn't noticed{{highlight|, right}}? But at the moment she turned her head, Rimechime plunged into a pile of dry leaves, dandelion fluff tickling its nose... Was it too slow? The girl {{highlight|brushed aside}} the leaves{{highlight|, and there, nestled in her palms, was Rimechime}}. In that instant, their eyes met.<br>"Was that {{highlight|lovely}} sound yours?"<br>"Ding-ling-ling~""
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