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** {{Color|Old:}} "This soft, bouncy pudding-pup Anima often gets flattened {{Highlight|under}} the pressures of life. Clever humans use this fact to give themselves a bit of a boost, bouncing high into the sky."

** {{Color|New:}} "This soft, bouncy pudding-pup Anima often gets flattened {{Highlight|by}} the pressures of life. Clever humans use this fact to give themselves a bit of a boost, bouncing high into the sky."

* Story ~~description~~ was updated:

* Story was updated:

** {{Color|Old:}} "Puddlipup was confused. Eggnok often {{Highlight|shared its}} stories of ~~{{Highlight|~~a}} rebellious, scrappy childhood with {{Highlight|Puddlipup}}, hoping to encourage Puddlipup to be tougher against those awful humans who pushed it around. "Woof?" {{Highlight|~~What~~'s tough?}} But I was born all soft and squishy, wasn't I!? "Woof..." Sometimes, it did feel like humans could be {{Highlight|a little...}} too enthusiastic, and it wasn't {{Highlight|great}} at handling ~~that~~ {{Highlight|kind of}} attention. ~~{{Highlight|~~In fact, it was even a bit introverted.}}"Woof!" Puddlipup ~~{{Highlight|~~suddenly seemed to understand}} what tough meant{{Highlight|~~...~~ After all, it knew ~~some~~}} humans ~~preferred hard,~~ {{Highlight|coarse bread}}... ~~{{Highlight|~~But it was born all soft and squishy, wasn't it!? Whaddaya want it to do!?}}

** {{Color|Old:}} "Puddlipup was confused. Eggnok often {{Highlight|shared its stories of a}} rebellious, scrappy childhood with {{Highlight|Puddlipup}}, hoping to encourage Puddlipup to be ''tougher'' against those awful humans who pushed it around. "Woof?" What's {{Highlight|''tough''?}} But I was born all soft and squishy, {{Highlight|wasn't I!?}} "Woof..." Sometimes, it did feel like humans could be {{Highlight|a little}}... too enthusiastic, and it wasn't {{Highlight|great}} at handling {{Highlight|that kind of attention. In fact, it was even a bit introverted}}.<br>"Woof!" Puddlipup suddenly seemed to understand what ''tough'' meant... {{Highlight|After all, it knew}} some humans {{Highlight|preferred hard, coarse bread... But it was born}} all soft and squishy, {{Highlight|wasn't it!? Whaddaya want it to do!?}}"

** {{Color|New:}} "Puddlipup was confused. Eggnok {{Highlight|would}} often {{Highlight|share}} stories of ~~{{Highlight|~~its own}} rebellious, scrappy childhood with {{Highlight|it}}, hoping to encourage Puddlipup to be tougher against those awful humans who pushed it around. "Woof?" ~~{{Highlight|~~Tougher?~~}} {{Highlight|~~Puddlipup looked confused.}} But I was born all soft and squishy, {{Highlight|right?}} "Woof..." Sometimes, it did feel like humans could be {{Highlight|somewhat}}... too enthusiastic, and it wasn't {{Highlight|really good}} at handling {{Highlight|such}} attention ~~{{Highlight|~~as an introvert.}} "Woof!" Puddlipup seemingly understood what tough meant~~{{Highlight|~~! Some humans}} {{Highlight|like their bread}} hard ~~{{Highlight|~~and crusty. Puddlipup got it.}}"

** {{Color|New:}} "Puddlipup was confused. Eggnok {{Highlight|would}} often {{Highlight|share stories of its own}} rebellious, scrappy childhood with {{Highlight|it}}, hoping to encourage Puddlipup to be ''tougher'' against those awful humans who pushed it around. {{Highlight|"Woof?" ''Tougher''? Puddlipup looked confused.}} But I was born all soft and squishy, {{Highlight|right?}} "Woof..." Sometimes, it did feel like humans could be {{Highlight|somewhat}}... too enthusiastic, and it wasn't {{Highlight|really good}} at handling {{Highlight|such attention as an introvert.}} "Woof!" Puddlipup seemingly understood what ''tough'' meant! Some humans {{Highlight|like their bread hard and crusty. Puddlipup got it. But... I was just born to be}} all soft and squishy, {{Highlight|how could I ever get tough!?}}"

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 ** {{Color|Old:}} "This soft, bouncy pudding-pup Anima often gets flattened {{Highlight|under}} the pressures of life. Clever humans use this fact to give themselves a bit of a boost, bouncing high into the sky."
 ** {{Color|New:}} "This soft, bouncy pudding-pup Anima often gets flattened {{Highlight|by}} the pressures of life. Clever humans use this fact to give themselves a bit of a boost, bouncing high into the sky."
-* Story description was updated:
+* Story was updated:
-** {{Color|Old:}} "Puddlipup was confused. Eggnok often {{Highlight|shared its}} stories of {{Highlight|a}} rebellious, scrappy childhood with {{Highlight|Puddlipup}}, hoping to encourage Puddlipup to be tougher against those awful humans who pushed it around. "Woof?" {{Highlight|What's tough?}} But I was born all soft and squishy, wasn't I!? "Woof..." Sometimes, it did feel like humans could be {{Highlight|a little...}} too enthusiastic, and it wasn't {{Highlight|great}} at handling that {{Highlight|kind of}} attention. {{Highlight|In fact, it was even a bit introverted.}}"Woof!" Puddlipup {{Highlight|suddenly seemed to understand}} what tough meant{{Highlight|... After all, it knew some}} humans preferred hard, {{Highlight|coarse bread}}... {{Highlight|But it was born all soft and squishy, wasn't it!? Whaddaya want it to do!?}}
+** {{Color|Old:}} "Puddlipup was confused. Eggnok often {{Highlight|shared its stories of a}} rebellious, scrappy childhood with {{Highlight|Puddlipup}}, hoping to encourage Puddlipup to be ''tougher'' against those awful humans who pushed it around. "Woof?" What's {{Highlight|''tough''?}} But I was born all soft and squishy, {{Highlight|wasn't I!?}} "Woof..." Sometimes, it did feel like humans could be {{Highlight|a little}}... too enthusiastic, and it wasn't {{Highlight|great}} at handling {{Highlight|that kind of attention. In fact, it was even a bit introverted}}.<br>"Woof!" Puddlipup suddenly seemed to understand what ''tough'' meant... {{Highlight|After all, it knew}} some humans {{Highlight|preferred hard, coarse bread... But it was born}} all soft and squishy, {{Highlight|wasn't it!? Whaddaya want it to do!?}}"
-** {{Color|New:}} "Puddlipup was confused. Eggnok {{Highlight|would}} often {{Highlight|share}} stories of {{Highlight|its own}} rebellious, scrappy childhood with {{Highlight|it}}, hoping to encourage Puddlipup to be tougher against those awful humans who pushed it around. "Woof?" {{Highlight|Tougher?}} {{Highlight|Puddlipup looked confused.}} But I was born all soft and squishy, {{Highlight|right?}} "Woof..." Sometimes, it did feel like humans could be {{Highlight|somewhat}}... too enthusiastic, and it wasn't {{Highlight|really good}} at handling {{Highlight|such}} attention {{Highlight|as an introvert.}} "Woof!" Puddlipup seemingly understood what tough meant{{Highlight|! Some humans}} {{Highlight|like their bread}} hard {{Highlight|and crusty. Puddlipup got it.}}"
+** {{Color|New:}} "Puddlipup was confused. Eggnok {{Highlight|would}} often {{Highlight|share stories of its own}} rebellious, scrappy childhood with {{Highlight|it}}, hoping to encourage Puddlipup to be ''tougher'' against those awful humans who pushed it around. {{Highlight|"Woof?" ''Tougher''? Puddlipup looked confused.}} But I was born all soft and squishy, {{Highlight|right?}} "Woof..." Sometimes, it did feel like humans could be {{Highlight|somewhat}}... too enthusiastic, and it wasn't {{Highlight|really good}} at handling {{Highlight|such attention as an introvert.}} "Woof!" Puddlipup seemingly understood what ''tough'' meant! Some humans {{Highlight|like their bread hard and crusty. Puddlipup got it. But... I was just born to be}} all soft and squishy, {{Highlight|how could I ever get tough!?}}"
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